I know practically nothing about quantum entanglement aside from a short primer via NPR’s Invisibilia at the top of their show “Entanglement” and a hasty Google search. Even so, I’ve been writing around the idea of

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for the past week. Writing last week’s fiction workhorse, I thought about my relationship to my characters. Writers show up in their fictional pieces. Always in tiny ways – a snip of remembered conversation, the name of a restaurant. But sometimes we put more of ourselves into a character. And sometimes a character gets into us. I carry these people around. It’s like a joke my mom told (did it happen? or was it only a joke?) about a woman at a prayer meeting, sending up prayers for all these people in terrible situations. Turns out she was interceding on behalf of a soap opera.

Entanglement is interesting enough to me that I’ll keep exploring. Go listen to the episode linked above. The first story, “Mirror Touch,” is a beautiful and complex picture of synesthesia.

Fiction Workhorse Week Four 2450 Words

I was going to skip this week. When I sat at my notebook or turned the radio off in the car, nothing came. That isn’t true. I got stories. I met characters. But not for this space. Parameters can force a different creativity. I tell myself that. I mostly believe it. Here I have to come up with  pieces that play a few steps over the line, on the safe side, an editor watching my practice. I can live with that. This week was a challenge though.

The Fringe Presses In

Once a month, Dawn made a lasagna. Jack liked it and the kids ate it. Jack always remarked on that, the kids eating the lasagna. You should make it more often, he suggested. But if she made it more often, the kids would get tired of it. Also, it took a little time. It wasn’t a twenty-minute meal she could make after work. Instead, she made lasagna on a Saturday or Sunday, with fresh mozzarella from the morning’s trip to the grocery store. Today was Tuesday and she had shredded cheddar and Swiss. She’d called in sick and decided to make a lasagna to have something to do.

She sautéed a white onion and a few cloves of garlic. She opened a couple of cans of diced tomatoes and poured them in the pan. The inside of the cans smelled how her stomach felt. If she licked the lining of a can, Dawn knew she’d taste what she felt. For weeks a metallic tinge colored her bites and breaths.

This happened twice before. The first time the kids were just babies and she’d gotten a prescription for an antidepressant. The medication helped. She was terrified of being dependent on anything pharmaceutical so weaned herself after a year. By then, then Lauren and Caleb were sleeping through the night and she could too. She read about the brain. She exercised four times a week. When the metallic tinge returned, Dawn exercised five times a week, then six, then seven, giving her body over to a rotation of cardio and strength training. She lost twenty pounds. She sweated metal out.

That was four years ago. Her training remained fanatic. A gym friend suggested Dawn try a triathlon and she did. Then she bought the right gear. The garage was full of her stuff. One wall was tacked with pictures of trails cut into hillsides or winding through forests. She printed monthly training schedules. She entered lotteries for the more exclusive qualifying events, her aim to compete at Kona.

Look, she said to Jack when he’d yelled about the credit card bill. Look, it’s either sport or pills.

Pills are covered!

Well, this should be too. It’s keeping me happy.

And that’s what she told herself, that the fifteen mile rides, ten mile runs, hour long lap swims: they were keeping her alive. She believed it. So when the metallic tinge came back for a third time, Dawn broke her taper and ran. The marathon in May was only a kind of practice run for the Ironman in July. Skipping a taper would simulate complete exhaustion legs felt after a two point four mile swim and a one hundred twelve mile ride.

She knew she should stop when the tendons fanning over the top of her foot burned to the touch. Dawn pressed her thumb the length of each metatarsal. No pinpoint pain. She kept running.

When the kids were still small enough, she pushed them in the baby jogger. Lauren and Caleb babbled or talked or sang for the first mile or two and then lulled in toddler contemplation. Dawn pushed them in the baby jogger until they were four. They got heavy, the two of them together. She wanted them to hurry up and learn to ride a bike so she could take them to the track where they’d loop while she did intervals or sprints. By the time Dawn was getting into triathlons, the kids were in school and she was back to work full time. She woke while it was still dark, to train without abandoning Jack and the kids in the evenings.

Dawn licked the inside of the diced tomato can. It was close enough. The orange fringe she saw when she closed her eyes at night, like a mum. A mum that edged out everything else, all shades of orange. It wasn’t fire. It wasn’t hot. But it suffocated. She lay in bed tasting metal and pushing against the orange fringe, trying to paralyze herself with deep breathing and prayer. The fringe pressed itself closer closer. It was everything she didn’t want to think about on her miles past cow pastures and soy bean fields.

And for weeks now, this fringe had pressed in on her during the day. Just now, when she’d been slicing the white onion, Dawn had to stop for a minute, stare out the window at the still dead lawn. She’d had to put down the knife, let something else come into her mind. Not everything.

Her foot really hurt, just standing. Dawn decided to finish the lasagna and go for a run. She hurried through the layers and covered the dish with foil, made room in the fridge.


Dawn ran north, each step a sparkle of pain on the top of her foot. She turned on a narrow crowned road and ran toward the county line marked by a small green sign. There was a corner she called hers. She’d found it on one of her first long runs, when she’d been out of breath and stopped to stretch. She’d looked up and seen that no one was around. No long gravel drive to a hidden house, no field entrance. She’d hear or see a car in time to resume running or duck into the windbreak. Once or twice a month, on a weekend run, she came here to think. For ten minutes or twenty, she’d look up at the sky or cut through the windbreak to stare at the field or squat to examine tiny rocks tarred to the road.

It was almost noon when Dawn made it to the corner. She cut into the windbreak to relieve herself, pulled her running tights up as a car passed. She watched from the windbreak as the vehicle dipped and surfaced on the retreating hills. Her foot was broken. She was sure of it. She flexed the toes, toward and away from her shin. Knowing what would happen – a splinter of white – she jumped on the injured foot. A gray knot in her stomach now and the orange fringe at her shoulder. She was five or so miles from home. She had limped most of the last mile here.

Maybe a rest, she thought, stupidly. A rest wasn’t going to heal the invisible fracture on the second metatarsal. She run through pain before. Splintering shins, a rite of her first marathon training. Deep hip pain that came and went. Tight calves. A tight piriformis that tugged her gait to one side. Sparklers under her kneecaps. A knot just under her left shoulder blade. Singing hip flexors. Tendonitis in her ankle. And now her foot. Dawn hopped on the injured foot one more time, to be sure.

There was no service on her phone. She could make it back, she thought, if she went really really slow. Walking was as painful so she went for a limping jog up and down the ribbon of road, out to the wider highway where men driving pickups and large farm equipment raised their hands from the wheels. Dawn raised a hand in return. Her lips were a thin line.

Hold the stride. Keep pace. Land light. Land light. It didn’t matter. Dawn read about a woman competing in an Olympic marathon who broke her foot in the first third of the race, finished anyway. Keeping a pace at least twice as fast as Dawn was managing. She adopted the posture she’d seen other runners take in the last miles of a marathon, quit looking up, shuffling her steps. Two miles, she said aloud, when she only had that far to go. If she stopped, she’d lay down.

She was dizzy and thirsty. She got home an hour before Jack and the kids would come in the door. Faking it was impossible. In the shower she balanced on her good foot. She put on her bathrobe and made a sandwich in the kitchen. Now the pain was big enough to keep the fringe away. The pain was shaped like a spiral, rotating up her body from one tiny point, and continuing its twist over her head.

It was only a stress fracture. She was pretty sure. She pressed her thumbs the length of each metatarsal. Her second, a small bump already formed, the healing process started. She pressed until her vision went white. Six weeks rest, minimum. Swimming, the elliptical. Dawn thought she should have done this years ago, lay on the couch and prop her feet up, watch her pain change colors. If she moved, she’d throw up.

Jack and the kids came home.

You really weren’t feeling well, he said when she opened her eyes. She smiled. She said she was okay. Caleb noticed her foot first, swollen. He poked it.

What happened? Lauren asked.

I broke it. It’s a little broken.

How do you know? Caleb asked.

I can’t walk on it. There’s a bump. Here. Dawn took Caleb’s hand and pressed his fingers on the bump. Feel that? He nodded. It’s already healing, she said. Wow, he said.

Jack didn’t think it was wow. He wanted to know if she needed to go to the clinic. Dawn felt like she’d had a glass of wine. She smiled. No, no clinic. It’s fine. I’ll call in tomorrow too. That and the weekend, I’ll be able to walk by Monday.

You’re kidding, Jack said.

No. Monday. It’s only a tiny stress fracture. A stress reaction. The bones break a little and heal stronger.

Jack shook his head. You need to take a break, he said.

I am.

No marathon.

No marathon.

I mean it, Jack said, even if you think you can gut it out. You can’t do it.

I know, she said.. The pain shimmered a little.


They ate the lasagna. Lauren and Caleb like the cheddar and Swiss. Dawn read a stack of bedtime books, in no rush to add a last core workout to the day. She walked on her heel back to the living room where Jack had the tv on mute, two beers on the coffee table, a pile of math tests. She sat close to Jack, put her feet on the coffee table. They drank half a beer each before Jack asked if she’d made sub plans for tomorrow. She would, in a minute.

You don’t have to keep doing this to yourself, he said. He touched gently.

I’m so tired, she said. She didn’t say she was afraid. The initial spiral of pain had melted to a gray fog. Dawn couldn’t see the orange fringe from where she was, but she guessed it was near. She guessed it was waiting for the fog to drift. Right now, on the couch with a beer sweating in her hand, with her sad swollen foot propped on a pile of math tests, with her husband tracing circles on her thigh, the gray fog was thick enough to protect her from what the orange fringe had been pressing her to see: that she was failing at nearly everything. And now, she’d also failed at strength. Dawn breathed in the gray fog, burrowed into Jack’s shoulder. She need him to tell her it was okay, even if it wasn’t. Even when the fog lifted and her second metatarsal healed and she began running again, to her corner, where she’d invite the fringe to fight, where she’d scream at the sky and windbreak, throw clods of dirt from the field in the air, stand in dirt rain.

Dawn sat up, pulled away from Jack.

Hey, he said, What’s wrong?

Nothing. Nothing. Dawn got up and walked on her heel to the kitchen, opened the door to the garage. The cement floor was cold. She didn’t need her corner for this. She lowered herself carefully, on a yoga mat surrounded by weights. She sat with her legs stretched in front of her, like she might row away. The fog was gone. She was clear. She waited for the fringe. She wasn’t pushing back with another mile. Dawn sat and waited. Jack came to see. Dawn was still, speaking quietly.

I am not, she said. I am not.

I am, she said. I am.

She hit the floor with flat hands. She said more loudly, I am I am I am.

Jack took a step toward Dawn. She opened her eyes and looked at him. She said, I am okay. I am. He nodded. She said, Just like this, right? He nodded again. She said, I can’t keep trying harder. I’ve been trying harder for –

Jack reached her and knelt. He touched her swollen foot. He kissed her forehead. He pulled her to him. They sat on the cold floor like that, Jack playing with Dawn’s hair. Neither spoke. The fringe hovered near. It wouldn’t go. It would make Dawn look over edges, into dark holes. It would press her against walls and paralyze her in the open. She’d been wrong to think anything – tiny pills taken once a day, long runs, training – could kill the fringe. She prayed, pulled scraps of peace. The fringe was too patient.

I’m going to go to it, Dawn whispered.

What? Jack leaned back a little.

I’m tired. I’m just going to go through it this time. I need to know I can make it.

Jack didn’t really understand. He never had. Early in their marriage he’d come into their bedroom to find Dawn whispering prayers. She’d looked up at him, startled. I’m sorry, she said, I like to pray. It helps. Jack hadn’t known what to say. She tried a joke. If we were in Salem, I’d be tried for witchcraft, praying like it hurts.

She’d tried to explain the fringe then but he hadn’t understood. After the babies were born, he understood a little. When Dawn started running every day, he imagined she was running from the battle she’d been waging early in their marriage, when he’d found her praying and she’d made that awful joke. He imagined she was winning, even as he watched her limp or wince at a stretch. Her body got lean and hard, like an adolescent boy.

I can’t run it away this time, Dawn said. She looked at Jack. I need you, she said, It’s going to hurt. Already Dawn could see the knives. Jack nodded like he got it. She could see. She would flay herself on fear and doubt, pray like it hurt. Jack couldn’t know that yet. She looked at him like she’d looked at the babies, tenderly, with more love than she’d had a minute earlier. He helped her up. She couldn’t run this time. A heavy peace landed.

Fiction Workhorse Week Three 4041 Words

I should tell you where I found the workhorse model. In “The Getaway Car,” Ann Patchett talked about one of her professors who required  students to write one story a week. Later in the essay, Patchett said writing (and rewriting and rewriting) articles for magazines made her a workhorse.

Oh, and I should tell you I used a first sentence I posted months ago. Go find what’s languishing in your notebook or files, waiting.

It Happened Like That

The photo Tim showed me was creased, a line from hair to chin. He pointed to the man’s cupid lips and then to his own. “I think this is my father,” he said.

“Where’d you find him?”

“In my mom’s underwear drawer.”

I blushed. Tim knew his mom did that to his friends. She had Tim when she was sixteen and anyone who didn’t know thought she was the older sister. He punched my arm. “Sorry,” I said. “You want to know what else I found?” he asked. I shook my head. I’d gone through my own mom’s underwear drawer once, big white cotton flags you could send up in surrender, nesting nude bras. Mrs. Hayes picked up Burger King on the way to watch our soccer games. She made Tim let me choose what to watch when I was at their house. Knowing she wore boring underwear or lacy bits, either way, I’d die.

“What makes you think he’s your dad?”

“Look at us!” Tim held the picture up, tried on the somber gaze of the man. I shrugged. “It is,” he said, “You know it is.”

“Then who is he?”

“My dad.”

“You don’t know his name.”

“Not yet.”

“You tell your mom?” I said that just as Mrs. Hayes pulled up in Carl’s Mustang. Tim put the photo in his backpack, put a finger to his lips. Mrs. Hayes leaned across the front seat and opened the door.


We were fourteen, the summer before we started freshman year at St. Peter’s. We were skinny kids, two only children who’d made one another siblings in elementary school. In sixth grade, Tim told me Carl wasn’t his real dad. He’d only just found out, overhearing a conversation between his mom and Carl. He looked like he was going to cry. It was a bad time for Tim to find out his dad was not his father. He started calling Carl Carl.

Later, in college, Tim told me how dumb he felt. “I should have known as soon as I did math,” he said. His mom married Carl when Tim was a toddler and he had no memories of life without a dad. In sixth grade, whenever Tim got mad at his mom he screamed about the lie he’d been living. It wasn’t a lie, though, just a kind of fragile armor. They had the same last name. Carl tickled and wrestled Tim. The two of them went fishing up north. Carl didn’t change. He was always kind. After one fight I was there for, Tim and Mrs. Hayes ran to their rooms, slamming doors, leaving Carl and me at the kitchen table. Carl sighed, slumped a little. He dished casserole onto our plates, bowed his head in silent grace. When he looked up he said, “Sometimes I forget. He looks like me, you know?”

Tim did look a little like Carl. The same coarse straw colored hair. Wiry build. I wondered if that was what Mrs. Hayes saw in Carl, a good substitute.


A year or two before we started high school, Mrs. Hayes met with a class of tenth grade girls. She talked about the holiness of marriage. She emphasized abstinence with her own teen pregnancy as a prop. This one assembly proved popular enough with the school administration that Mrs. Hayes was invited back each spring. When we were sophomores, Mrs. Hayes told Tim she wouldn’t go if he didn’t want her to. “Everyone knows, Mom,” he said. Neither of us were dating girls anyway. A year later when Tim got a girlfriend, Katie stopped his hand at her waistband. “Your mom,” she whispered, “Made me sign a purity pledge.”

Tim told me about that when we were in our first year of college together. Our childhood fantasy of sharing a room worked out okay at first. The day we moved in, our moms took us out for lunch while my dad and Carl built the lofts. The two of us were sitting across from the women who’d made us both dinner, cheered equally from the sidelines, put up with our shit, as my mom said. Mrs. Hayes would never say “shit.” The diner was full of parents having last lunches with their kids, all the years gone to this minute hoping everyone had said enough of the right things. I kept looking around, at the girls. I hadn’t gotten a girlfriend in high school.

“Hey,” Mrs. Hayes said. She smiled when I turned to her. “Be careful, okay? Watch out for each other.”


Tim liked to drink. This was something I knew but hadn’t been a part of in high school. This was our one split, that and Katie. But now Katie was in Green Bay and Tim had unpacked on one side of the room. The first weekend, he found a group heading to a frat party. He didn’t ask if I wanted to go along. I had this stabbing pain, like maybe we shouldn’t have roomed together, maybe he wanted to do his own thing after all. But when he returned at one in the morning, drunk, I understood why he needed me in the room. I knew his story. I didn’t mind listening to it again.

He’d gotten his father’s name from his mom. He’d begged for years. He punched a hole in the garage drywall. He’d picked the filing cabinet lock. Finally, his mom relented. She said he probably wouldn’t find Alan Smith. She’d barely found him.

“He left before he knew,” Tim said to me in the dark. “Before he knew he had a baby on the way, he was gone. He left.” When Tim talked about Alan or his mom, he’d take long pauses. Sometimes he’d fall asleep in his clothes. Sometimes he’d start talking again and the narrative thread worked into me dream so that I was Tim too, and I was looking for Alan and I despaired that my father had the last name Smith. “Effing Smith! Smith!” Tim said and sometimes laughed, sometimes went sullen at the impossibility of tracking down a man with two common names.

“He’s from Canada,” Tim said, “Which narrows it. By millions.”

Tim put up a map of Canada in our room and started disappearing to the computer lab in the basement, googling Alan Smith Canada. He printed out a list of hundreds. He spent a week narrowing the list by age. This was before Facebook was big so he couldn’t look at pictures. He wasn’t sure it was okay to email or call the Alan Smiths and say maybe they were traveling through Wisconsin nineteen, twenty years ago.

“Mom said he was working, logging maybe. He was twenty-two. Think I can cross off the college professor?” Tim was hunched over a stack of printed pages. It was three in the morning. I had a test at eight. I said that. Tim kicked back his chair and turned off the desk light, stomped into the hall. “Good night, Sleeping Beauty,” he said before slamming the door.

He got a little mean. I didn’t know if it was how much he drank or if it was Alan Smith. I was beginning to think it might be Alan Smith, the nature part growing in thick like Tim’s torso filling out. He didn’t look much like Carl anymore.


Every other weekend Tim drove across the state to see Katie. After first semester, I waited for those two or three days of solitude. One Friday night a group of Tim’s friends pounded on the door. A couple of them were already swaying. When they found out Tim was gone, they insisted I come along. “The phantom roomie,” one of them called me, putting an arm around me. We stopped briefly to pick up two girls, each of us doing shots, crowded between two bunks and laughing hysterically. It was like a movie I’d seen.

We walked to a dumpy frat house on the edge of campus, paid five bucks for a red Solo cup, and walked single file down warped steps to the hot, damp basement. I got drunk quickly because I didn’t know how not to. I leaned against a cool cement wall and watched the people around me pair off, disappear. Soon was the only one there who wasn’t in the frat. The guy who’d been pouring tiny shots all night told me they were going to turn the lights on. “Won’t be pretty,” he said, “I think a few people threw up.” I went into the cold night. I wasn’t as drunk as I’d felt in the basement. I put my hands in my pockets and made my way back to the room where I stood in front of Tim’s map and looked at the stars he’d drawn over all the possible addresses his father kept.

The next weekend when all the guys came for Tim, one of them said, “Hey, Phantom, you gotta come along. Come on.” Tim looked at me and shrugged. A couple of beers later, he leaned into me and shouted above the music. “I’m sorry! I was such a dick! I don’t know why!” In third grade, I ate a wood chip from the playground because Tim said he’d do it after me. When I swallowed the last of it, Tim looked very sad and said he couldn’t do it. Maybe he’d always been a little like this. “That’s okay!” I yelled back. We didn’t talk about Alan Smith all night.


I didn’t get a girlfriend that year. And Katie broke up with Tim. We packed up for summer, two boys who’d finally gotten to share a room. I was going home to work with my dad but Tim decided to take a road trip through Canada. “You can come, if you like,” he said. I thought about it. I really needed some cash. “You think you’ll find him?” I asked. He shrugged. “What’ll you say?” Tim grinned. “’Daddy? Is that you?’ Scare the fuck outta him.”

He called me twice. The first time, so pleased I thought he’d found the Alan Smith. “No, no. I wish. But this guy, this Alan Smith was really nice. Doesn’t look anything like me. He’s a First Nation. I don’t know how he got a name like this.” The second time, a little whispery, from a pay phone in a vestibule. “I think it’s the Alan Smith. I got a picture.” Later we’d look at that picture – not even the full profile of a man – and the creased photo from his mom’s underwear drawer and go back and forth how likely it was the same man. We saw what we wanted to see, given the night. Both photos were tacked on the map.


Mrs. Hayes and Carl surprised us one Friday afternoon. They’d gotten a letter from Tim’s advisor. Tim wasn’t doing well. I wasn’t in the room when they showed up. My stomach goes ice to think what Mrs. Hayes thought when she saw the map, that long ago stolen photo. By the time I got back from my afternoon class, Mrs. Hayes was sitting on the futon, her face splotchy from crying. Carl stood by the window, looking out at the parking lot and a row of trees beyond. Tim was at his desk.

“Did you know?” Mrs. Hayes asked me. I looked at my shoes. “I told you to look out for each other,” she said.

“He just wants to know,” I said, the first time I’d ever talked about Alan Smith with anyone other than Tim.

“He knows enough,” Mrs. Hayes said. Even crying, with smeared make up, she was beautiful. It reminded me of something mean my mom said, about how Mrs. Hayes was only invited to speak to the St. Peter’s girls because she’d made it through pretty.

“The name,” I said. I heard myself say Alan Smith. “Maybe he would like to know he has a son.”

“Would you? After twenty years?”

“I don’t know.”

Carl turned from the window. “I would,” he said, “But we came here about the grades. Tim, we’re worried about you. That’s all.”

“What did I do?” Mrs. Hayes said to Tim. “You have a dad. You went to a good school. What are you doing?”

“Mom. I’ve said it. I just want to find him. I love Carl –”

“But what did I do?” Mrs. Hayes’s hands were fists in her lap and tears ran down her face again. Tim got really still. I knew what he was going to say. He’d said it to me after nights of drinking. What his mom did. He said, “You fucked a transient man six years older than you, Mom.” Carl took a step forward. I think Tim wanted to be hit. Mrs. Hayes slid from the futon to the floor, kneeling at Tim’s feet, her hands covering her face, sobbing. When she stood up, she looked at Tim and said, “I wouldn’t take it back.”

“You didn’t have to say it like that,” I said, after. Tim stayed in his chair, clenching and unclenching his fists.


He dropped out at semester. I returned from winter break to find a Korean roommate. The next year I moved off campus and invited Tim to come back, take a job in LaCrosse. By then, he’d decided to get his commercial license and drive rigs across North America. For a few years he emailed occasionally. He came to my wedding, sent postcards from places I’d never been. When I moved my family to Colorado, I emailed our new address but didn’t hear back. No postcards. A few more years went by like that. When we went back to Wisconsin, I drove by Tim’s house. I didn’t see Mrs. Hayes or Carl. The last time I’d spoken with either was at my wedding. When my parents bought a house in Phoenix, we had no reason to return to my hometown.

My wife answered the phone one Saturday and put a hand over her mouth, passed the receiver to me. It was Mrs. Hayes, telling me that Tim died yesterday, an accident north of Winnepeg. I listened. I couldn’t speak. When I hung up I found my wife already booking a plane ticket. My parents flew to Wisconsin too, the three of us staying at the Holiday Inn. Mrs. Hayes asked if I’d speak at the memorial. Tim didn’t want a mass. I don’t remember what I said. I had an idea before I went up, a few lines on a piece of hotel paper, but I can’t remember if I said what I wanted to. I said he was a brother. When I said that I looked out at Mrs. Hayes and Carl, the two people who might have loved him more than I did.

I hadn’t missed him as much as I could have. Being in our hometown again, that made me remember what I lost. He was a brother. I kept thinking that. And I saw him everywhere. By the fourth day, I wanted to go back to Colorado, to my own wife and boys. I didn’t want to keep seeing Tim. I felt like I’d said goodbye years ago. I thought Tim would live on wherever he was, driving lines across a map, drinking black coffee, reading paperbacks in his bunk. I pictured him like that, away and alone, but alive. Now that he was dead, I didn’t want to see him at all. I’d rather he stay the brother I found in grade one.

It would’ve been rude to leave without saying goodbye to his parents. I parked the rental in front of their house and rang the doorbell. I couldn’t remember ever ringing the bell before. Mrs. Hayes answered. She stepped aside and I went in to the house that’d been my second home all of my growing up. They had a new dining table and living room set. The pictures on the walls were the same. A new TV. Carl got up from the recliner, extended his hand. “Appreciate what you said,” he said. I nodded. He gestured for me to sit and Mrs. Hayes went to the kitchen for drinks.

“Laura was hoping you’d come by,” he said, “She has something to show you.”

Mrs. Hayes came in with a tray, sodas and glasses with ice cubes. She pushed aside a stack of sympathy cards on the coffee table. “Here you go,” she said and smiled. She wasn’t wearing any make up and that made her look softer.

“Laura, I said you had something,” Carl said.

“Oh. Yes, I do. Just let me.” Mrs. Hayes poured half a can of Pepsi in a glass and handed it to me. She came back a moment later with an envelope. I set my glass down. The letter was handwritten, Tim’s cramped print. He found Alan Smith in Sudbury. He was sure it was the right Alan Smith because one of the sons looked like Tim. I could feel Mrs. Hayes watching me. Tim decided not to approach his father. Having found the Alan Smith, he wrote, he wasn’t sure which line of the many he’d rehearsed would come out of his mouth. After a day thinking, he left Sudbury, having only driven by the Smith house a few times, catching glimpses of his father’s life. He ended the letter saying he wouldn’t contact Alan Smith but if you want to, here is his address.

I turned the envelope over to check the postmark. A couple of years ago. “Did you?” I asked. Mrs. Hayes shook her head. “I wish I had,” she whispered. Carl said, “I didn’t think it was a good idea.”

“I didn’t think so either, at the time,” Mrs. Hayes said, “But now.”

“We’ll probably write a letter, send a picture,” Carl said.

“I could go,” I said. I remembered all the stars on Tim’s map. One must have been on Sudbury. I could change my flight, take the rental up for a few days. I said all of this on the phone to my wife while Mrs. Hayes packed a small cooler with food. It was midafternoon and if I left now, I could make it to Canada before it got too late. Spend a whole day driving east to Sudbury. Meet Alan Smith. Give him a photo of Tim, tell him what his boy had been like.

I didn’t think about what I would actually say. I stopped at a hotel and showered, watched tv until I fell asleep. I left before the hotel staff had finished setting out the breakfast muffins and cereals. The highway was roughed up by winters, stretches of it potholed. I drove through and around little towns. I stopped for coffee at a Tim Horton’s. Around noon I checked GPS. I had at least another six. I wanted to stop. I thought I could finish the trip tomorrow. It was midweek. Alan Smith must work. I couldn’t just show up at his house at eight a.m. anyway. But I continued, made to the edge of Sudbury.

I checked into the hotel and called my wife. I thought about calling Mrs. Hayes, but there was nothing to tell her. I walked down the street to a fast food place and ate a tray of onion rings, had a milkshake. Back in my room, I took a shower and turned on the TV, turned it off. I thought about my boys. And about Tim. A single vehicle accident. I looked at my phone. Ten days ago now. When we were kids, that was as long as we were ever apart, when our families took vacations.


The Smith house was an old two-story with a small porch and cracked sidewalk. I parked out front at seven in the morning, hoping I might catch Alan on his way to work. I watched the front door.

This is how it would go: Alan Smith and his wife would pause their morning. They’d send their youngest son out the door. Tim would be right. I’d see Tim in the boy’s features as he looked from his parents to me, then back at his dad to be sure it was okay to go. After he left, Alan’s wife – Janet maybe – would pour coffees and set out cream and the three of us would sit at table waiting for each of us to stir in the right amount of creamer.

Do you remember a girl named Laura Brillowski? I’d ask.

Alan’s brow would furrow. He’d run a hand through his hair, looking for a recollection. I’d wait a minute. Janet would ask what this was about. From Wisconsin? I’d say, Late seventies, like ’78?

Alan would shake his head. He didn’t remember. He’d apologize because this was clearly important to me. Janet would ask him if this was when he was pulping wood in the U.P. but it was another summer. Janet would ask again what this was all about. Then I’d have to say it. I’d have to say that Laura Brillowski had a son nine months after Alan had gone on, to the U.P. or wherever. That she’d married a man named Carl and they raised the boy as their own.

But Tim – that’s your son’s name, I’d say – Tim found a picture of Alan and then the name of his father. He looked for you for years. He found you, I’d say.

Alan’s hand would be too shaky to pick up his coffee cup. Janet would squint her eyes and ask if I was speaking in the third person, if I was a crazy. She might even half stand to find her mobile buried in her purse.

I’d have to raise my hands a little, show peace. No, I’d say, Tim was my best friend growing up, like a brother. I only just heard he found you. He told his mom – Laura.

Alan would pull a memory from a trip he and a few boys took on a rare long weekend. He would remember Laura’s lips like berries. He would tell Janet it was okay. He hadn’t known Laura’s last name. He hadn’t thought. It happened like things do, kids going to an old cabin on a lake. She was there. It happened like that.

Janet would bow her head. Alan would ask if I brought a picture and I’d show him one of Tim in our first year of college. It looked a lot like the one of Alan Tim kept. Alan would bring the picture closer. He’d put a hand over his mouth. Janet would lean over to see. They’d forget that I talked about Tim in the past tense and I’d have to tell them they couldn’t meet him. And then, watching them sit with that birth and death in the space of fifteen minutes, I would know I’d made a mistake. I’d understand why Tim only drove by the house, caught a glance at the man who’d fathered him and gone on to have more children he loved because he knew them.

Coming in late and unknown, it wasn’t fair. Tim must have decided that. It wasn’t fair to Alan Smith or his wife or his kids. If Tim had never learned this truth, not the worst truth to learn, but one that couldn’t go away, where would he be? Alan didn’t know yet, didn’t walk around carrying Tim. For Alan, it was all done when it happened like that.


The front door opened and a lanky teenager jumped down the step and walked down the street. A couple of minutes later, a woman in a pantsuit carrying an oversize leather bag walked across the lawn in her heels and got into a Honda, backed down the drive and didn’t look my way at all. Then Alan Smith came out and it was like looking at Tim, if Tim made it to sixty. He wore old jeans and a flannel, carried a lunchbox cooler. His pickup grumbled and backed down the drive. Smith Remodeling & Restoration stenciled white on red. I don’t think he saw me either. I sat for a while longer, then programmed the GPS for the long drive back.

Writing It In My Head

For this week’s Fiction Workhorse, I am writing my one to five thousand story in my head. You’ll have to take my word for it, that’s it’s great. By the time it makes its way to the page, perhaps so-so.

This one-a-week is cracking the whip. While writing the last two stories, I stood in front of my laptop typing things like

This is pointless
Can’t think of anything. Anything anything

until something showed up. Five hundred words of that pep. I went to the page with a story in mind but no place to begin. I usually use my notebooks to write around possible starts for pieces, but I bypassed the slow writing for typed words. This week I haven’t opened my one-a-week file. Instead, I turn the radio off in the car and think about my characters. In my notebook, I jot names, places, possible plot. I am trying to write a story in my mind so that when I begin typing, I’m not at so many losses. There are chunks of the story I haven’t clarified yet. Big fat chunks. In a moment, I’ll return to my notebook and think through: the framing of the story, its scope.

This is a unique challenge, to let a story write itself in my mind, but only for so long because I’ve decided that I have to post it Thursday. The point is practice. Maybe something will come of a couple of these stories – or maybe these are just the laps I’m running.


Fiction Workhorse Week Two 2780 Words

Well, here you go:

The Long Story About Nothing

Jury had a novel he started in undergrad. He’d used an excerpt for his application to two writing programs, was declined by both, and took a copy editor job in his college town. For three months, Jury was diligent. After work, he sat with his laptop open in a far corner of nonfiction at the public library. He ate a sandwich and apple, a repeat of lunch, and typed for two hours. He believed that showing up was the majority of a writer’s work. Sitting at a desk, file open, adding one word after another.

After neither program accepted him, Jury determined to accept the interval as a gift. How many writers had he heard of who quit writing after earning an MFA? He wouldn’t quit. He would write himself dead. And in spring, he’d have a better excerpt to send for consideration.

For three months, Jury wrote like that, to find the end of his first novel and an MFA spot. Both were there, waiting. When students arrived for fall semester, Jury got together with a few classmates in the creative writing program. They got together to workshop on a Saturday morning, taking over a corner booth at the Blueberry Muffin. You’re still working on this, one of them said, a little flat.

The novel was about a boy growing up. Then it was about a boy finding his place. It was also about a boy falling in love. There was a middle part about the loss of innocence on a hunting trip. Jury thought he was in the last quarter of the book, but wasn’t sure. So much happens to a boy.

A couple weeks later, Jury had another fifty pages to workshop but no one replied to his text. He emailed them an attachment. One of the girls called him and said she was really sorry, but her workload killed. He said it was cool. He hated himself for saying that and made a note. Maybe the boy could have that scene.

Work was okay. He was using his English degree, minimally, editing copy for a quarterly magazine called Priceless Porcelain, devoted to anything old and porcelain. It was printed on thick glossy paper and had circulation of seven thousand in the U.S., another five hundred or so abroad, mostly in Canada. The office was staffed by women his mother’s age who were always surprised Jury had a girlfriend. The best part about the office was the baked goods set out in the break room. The other best part, Jury discovered, was that no one expected a riveting five hundred word article about washstand basins. They expected a five hundred word article about washstand basins with commas in the right places. This left plenty of time to roam online and work on his novel. He quit closing his browser when a coworker walked by his desk.

Going to North Carolina? Teresa asked.

Jury swiveled around. No, he said, Just curious. I saw a Civil War era tea set was in the upcoming issue.

I thought that was in Virginia.

Maybe. Jury smiled until Teresa smiled back and walked away. His novel was set in North Carolina and he’d never been. Google street view helped.

Briana was in her last year. She read Jury’s latest pages with a neutral face. Early in their dating, she said she would be his cheerleader, not his editor, as she had no interest in any sort of creative conflict in a relationship. She danced ballet, had spent most of her life in rehearsal. He knew nothing about her art, only that it was good. She never said his was anything but, licking her finger and setting another page aside.

In late September, Briana cracked her ankle in two places. Surgery was unavoidable. Completing her senior thesis was impossible. For a month, Briana stayed in her apartment watching movies and daytime tv. Finally, she reread his entire novel and asked if he wanted an honest opinion.

Would you give me a dishonest one if I asked?


Okay. I’ll take honest.

I don’t like it at all. Briana nudged the pile of paper with her good foot. Parts are good, she said, But when you read the whole thing at once, no.

It’s eighty-eight thousand words.

I know.

What am I supposed to do?

Briana shrugged. Start over, maybe. She pointed at her cast. Like this. I don’t know what I’m going to do either.

Have you hated it all along?

I didn’t say ‘hate.’


Briana shrugged. She pointed at her cast again. She took a pinch of fat at her waist. She said, I think I’m missing my endorphins. I’m sorry if I’m being mean.

No, Jury said, I mean, I’d rather you be honest. I had no idea.

I know. I’m sorry.

You still love me?

Yes. But you should start writing something better than this.

You think I can?

God, I hope so.

His head felt like a balloon. He asked if she need anything before he left and she said an ankle. He got her glass of ice water and a bowl of popcorn, kissed her cheek and let himself out. They’d been together for two years and it’d always seemed a kind of miracle. She was too gorgeous and he was too quiet. They tasted like white milk together. This was the first drop of vinegar.

At work the next day, Peggy from ad sales sat down across from Jury. She said, I heard you’re working on a book.

I was, he said. He’d stayed up all night skimming his pages tallying a stupid, awful, irredeemable story.

Well, I had an idea, soon as I heard you are a writer. Last year I did Nanowrimo. Hear of it? Jury nodded and Peggy continued. I got swamped. I’ve never written so much as a letter and I thought I could tell about my great-aunt in the laundries.


The nuns ran them. But the story, writing it, was a nightmare. But you write. I thought you and me could be writing buddies.

Like workshop?

No, buddies. You write your book – Peggy waved a hand a Jury’s laptop – and I’ll write mine. We’ll do word counts. I’ll show you a few sites that give inspiration.

Can I think about it? Peggy said sure and got up, smoothed her skirt. Just remember, she said, It all starts next week. I might cheat a little, get a few thousand words in now. She winked.

By lunch, Jury decided he was in. He called Briana to see how she was feeling. She was angry and apologetic at once. She did need her endorphins. He told her he had a new writing project, maybe she’d like to try it too since she – Briana interrupted, Since I have time? Is that what you were going to say? No, Jury said, but he meant yes.

Peggy, Briana and Jury decided to be writing buddies. They met on Halloween at Briana’s apartment. Peggy brought a bag of mini candy bars. They went online, signed up for daily emails, bookmarked a plot generator site called Need A Twist!!? Briana found a site composed entirely of links to blogs chronicling writers’ own Nanowrimos. Who has time to blog about writing a fifty thousand word book, Peggy wanted to know. The unemployed, Briana said, I could do that. Want me to blog about this? She gestured at the three of them bathed in laptop glow, candy wrappers at their feet. No, Jury and Peggy said.

The plan was to write at least two hours or two thousand words a day, whichever came first. What if I only write fifteen hundred words in two hours? Briana asked. Won’t happen, Jury said, You’ll do it if you keep typing. Trust me.

November 1

Ever since she was a young girl, Taylor wanted to dance.

Briana typed her entire childhood dance fantasy into Taylor. Three hours, twenty-six hundred words.

Bridget knew the risks when she went undercover.

Peggy hammered out two thousand words even and spent an hour googling CIA FBI Conspiracy Russia Cuba Mob Cartel, looking for her bad guy.

No one wants to die young.

He recognized his brother in the café but neither of them said hello.

It’d been ten years.

“I thought you were dead,” she said.

I am dead.

Jury deleted all of his terrible first sentences for zero words. He kept that same tally for days two and three. Zero, zero. Dozens of deleted first sentences. I thought you were supposed to just keep typing, Briana said. Jury had no story. He’d been writing about the boy for too long. Now he had to find a new character. The only ones that kept showing up were depressed and or suicidal and or maniacal and or desperate and or very, very unmotivated. And or dead.

On day four, Peggy stopped by his desk and said, I just had a breakthrough. I know why Bridget wants to kill Vlad. They were lovers. I can’t believe I didn’t already know that! He drove a wedge between Bridget and her sister. Of course she wants to kill him.

Jury finished editing ad copy and opened his laptop. He typed: Write a story. Not about the boy. Go. Now. Write something. Now. First sentence. Pull some teeth, man! Write! Write! Eight thousand words due tomorrow.

Could he count that as twenty-five of the eight thousand?

Jury got take away and went to Briana’s. She was on the couch, weeping and typing, her legs propped on the coffee table, a pint of ice cream sweating next to her. She waved dismissively and kept typing. Jury dished pad Thai in the kitchen and opened a beer. From the living room he heard Briana cry louder. He carried in their food. All he wanted was to watch tv.

It isn’t fair, Briana said, She almost got accepted. She should have been accepted!

New York School Ballet? Jury said. Briana nodded and blew her nose. Jury said, You can rewrite it so she gets in. Briana said, But what’s the story then? I know she can do it. She’s only fifteen. Jury picked up the remote. At a commercial, Briana said she wanted to keep writing, did he mind? Jury turned the tv off and went home. In his own apartment he opened his laptop and tried for the thousandth first sentence.

The next thing you type is your first sentence.

He wasn’t sure what came next.

Jury paused. It was as good as any at this point. Six of fifty thousand.

November 9

Peggy brought a lasagna to Briana’s. Jury made a tossed salad. They ate in the living room. Taylor got into the dance program. Bridget was closer to finding out Vlad’s true identity, with her sister’s help. What about you, Peggy asked Jury, How many words? Who’s your character?

I think his name is Ben.

You think?

I’m not really sure.

How not sure? Briana said.

I’ve got a thousand words, maybe.

Peggy laughed. Jury looked at his lasagna. You got three weeks, Peggy said, Get cracking. The three of them spent the evening typing. Jury managed another twenty-five hundred words and picked a title: The Long Story About Nothing. Too transparent, he thought. But right on. Now he had an answer for the women at Priceless Porcelain. My story is about nothing, he said. He wasn’t lying.

Writing about nothing turned out to be the most beautiful thing in the whole world. Jury had spent too many years obsessed with the boy. Writing Ben’s story of nothing felt like a game. Whatever scene came to mind, he wrote. Nothing connected. He felt drunk, adding longwinded paragraphs, scripting wandering dialogue. It was too easy to write absolutely nothing and he wished he’d tried it ages ago. Why had he ever been so earnest? What kind of writing did earnest yield? After three years of chronicling the boy, all Jury wanted to do was kill him. Writing Ben into a story of nothing was like – he didn’t care. He didn’t pause for the right metaphor. He typed on.

November 13

The way Alex looked at Taylor made her heart flip flop.

Vlad persuaded Bridget to drop the gun.

An abandoned house!

November 20

Jury’s mom called about Thanksgiving. He was right at twenty thousand words. I don’t know, Mom, he said, I’m thirty-five thousand short.

You could go hide in your dad’s office. I want to see Briana.

She’s beating me by ten thousand right now.


How about first weekend in December?

Fine. Bring Briana. His mom hung up and he felt only a little bad about skipping Thanksgiving. When he typed enough to get light-headed, Jury wondered if he was onto something. Maybe this book about nothing would turn into something. Maybe there were entire stories worth writing, hiding in endless scroll. Maybe. Briana was already looking up agents, sure that her book about a young dancer finding love in New York could be the next YA thing, even if it wasn’t about a vampire in a post-apocalyptic world. And Peggy mentioned the phrase “movie rights” at lunch one day. They were all on a tear, far enough in to see the end and dumb enough to be sure they’d make it.

The panic set in on Thanksgiving. Peggy was hosting her kids and grandkids at her house. She hid in her bedroom during the game and texted Jury: I may as well be watching porn. Everyone’s mad at me. He texted back: I didn’t go home. I’m getting coal for Christmas. Briana hadn’t gone home either and she and Jury typed with the Macy’s parade on mute. Word, Briana said and Jury answered his count. By midafternoon, Briana was at forty-seven thousand, but not near the end of the book. I have at least three more chapters, she said. Jury was hovering near forty thousand and needed a break. He put on his jacket and went out.

Down the street was a bar called Burt’s. A sad collection of old men sat hunched over their beers. Jury ordered a burger. It was a mess to eat. He ordered another to go, for Briana. She had his laptop on her lap.


She looked up, reached for the paper bag. The month of sitting had softened her face, filled her thighs. I wanted to know, she said.

I didn’t say you could.

We’re going to get married aren’t we?


Well, I should know these things, like what you write. I should be part of that.

Are you cheering?

Yes. This is better than the boy.


I don’t get it though.

Jury sighed and sat down. There is nothing to get, he said, That’s the whole point.

You mean, it’s literally about –


Briana closed her eyes. Are you happy?


You don’t want to off yourself?


Okay. Then. Well, you have another ten thousand to go. Good luck.

November 28

After the performance, Alex gave Taylor a dozen roses.

Bridget sighted her gun.

Ben ate a parmesan cheese sandwich because he’d always wondered what a parmesan cheese sandwich would taste like and now, after years of wondering, he would finally know.

The trick, Jury realized, was long, repetitive sentences. Those would add up to his missing five thousand words. He called in sick and got a text from Peggy: FAKER! He almost made Ben call in sick, but that was reminiscent of the boy, Jury’s own slouching shadow narrating a thinly fictionalized life. Ben would never call in sick. He would vomit in the board room before he called in sick. It would be better to write about the time Ben went cliff diving in Norway, Jury decided. The transatlantic flight alone might eat a thousand words.

On the last day of November, Briana got up from the couch. There was a permanent dent in the cushion. She hobbled to the bathroom and stepped on the scale. Taylor had danced her way through two years and sixty-one thousand words. Briana had typed and eaten her way to ten dimpled pounds. You love me like this? she said to Jury when he came by after work. You look great, he said. He was right at forty-nine thousand, seven hundred and two words. Everything looked great. He sat on the couch and started typing one last paragraph about nothing.

Peggy came by and the three of them ordered Chinese and opened a bottle of wine, toasted the end.

Alex lifted Taylor in his strong arms and she looked out into the audience.

Vlad was better than Bridget remembered.

Ben decided this would do, this time.